Proofread my essay 2

Proofread my essay and fix it according to all the comments given. Add the subheadings before every main point and follow these two rubrics.
Elements
Points
Content
Introduction page
Includes attention getter
____________/1
Provides appropriate entry to topic
____________/3
States research question(s)/research thesis
____________/1
Body 8-9 pages
Presents a structured body that includes all fully developed sections of paper
____________/20
Includes headings that reflect paper organization
____________/5
Supports points/arguments with credible source material and cites definitions of key terms/ideas as applicable
____________/20
Synthesizes multiple sources
____________/15
Shows evidence of critical thinking and in-depth analysis
____________/5
Conclusion page
Restates main points and/or answers research question(s)
____________/5
References 1 or more pages
Contains all and only cited texts
____________/2
Mechanics
Is accurate in grammar spelling punctuation capitalization word choice and use of transitions
____________/10
Citations
Uses correct APA in-text citations
____________/3
Includes correct APA references
____________/2
Format/layout
Follows APA page layout (title page running head headings font)
____________/3
Revision
Incorporates feedback from Working Draft
____________/5
Total
____________/100
Elements
Points
Content
Title Page
Abstract and Key Words
Summarizes research paper in about 150 words
_____/4
Lists 3-5 key words
_____/1
Introduction up to 1 page
Includes attention getter
_____/1
Provides appropriate entry to the topic
_____/2
States research question(s)/research thesis
_____/2
Body 9-11 pages
Presents a well-structured and logically argued discussion
_____/15
Includes headings that reflect the paper organization
_____/3
Supports all points/arguments with credible source material and cites definitions of key terms/ideas as applicable
_____/15
Synthesizes multiple sources
_____/7
Shows originality critical thinking and in-depth analysis
_____/10
Conclusion up to 1 page
Restates main points and/or answers the research question(s)
_____/3
Comes to logical conclusion from evidence
_____/3
Makes final comment(s)
_____/2
References
Contains all and only the cited texts
_____/2
Style
Entire paper
Is polished in tone and style appropriate for academic writing
_____/5
Mechanics
Entire paper
Is accurate in grammar spelling punctuation capitalization word choice and transitions using variety in sentence structure
_____/10
Citations
Entire paper
Uses correct APA in-text citations
_____/2
Includes correct APA references
_____/3
Format/ Layout
Entire paper
Follows APA page layout (title page running head headings font etc.)
_____/5
Revision
Incorporates feedback from the First Full Draft
_____/5
Total
_____/100